Comprehensive Evaluation on Urban Water Security Based on the Novel DPEBLR Concept Model and the Cloud Matter-Element Model: A Case Study of Chongqing, China
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Abstract.
The value of the manuscript would improve if the authors would explain the three abbreviations: DPSIR, HEVD and DPEBLR.
The statement “The government should continue to slow down population growth is easier said that done. What the government can do is to slow down urbanization allowing essential infrastructure to be ready before the area is occupied
Introduction
The value of the manuscript would improve if the authors would explain ALL abbreviations and after that use the abbreviations throughout the text. Do not expect that all potential readers know the abbreviations. If there are many abbreviation, you may even want to include a list of abbreviations in the beginning of the manuscript. This is very reader-friendly.
p. 1: Please check the hyphenation of words. Many are not correct
p1 line 34: “ecological environment construction of”, can be replaced by biodiversity in cities, or blue-green areas in cities
p1 line 35 and 36: have contributed to the increasing frequency of urban water security incidents and the severity of the consequences. Alternative: have contributed to the increasing frequency of urban water security and severity of incidents.
P1 line 39: the healthy development can be replaced by sustainable development. The reasons is that it is not clear if you mean environmental health, human health of
Line 48. Similar observations have been made by the World Economic Forum, where in the annual risk report, water (and climate change), food security and social instability have been highlighted as major risk. You may wish to include this reference: World Economic Forum. (2014). Global risks 2013 (9th ed.). Geneva: World Economic Forum.
Many cities in China have been assessed by the following authors and the paper needs to be included in both the introduction and the discussion: Chang, I-S., Zhao, M., Chen, Y., Guo, X. Zhu, Y., Wu, J. & Yuan, T.(2020). Evaluation of the integrated water resources management in China’s major cities – based on the City Blueprint Approach. Journal of Cleaner Production 262, 121419. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.jclepro.2020.121410
Line 79/80: so it is widely used in the fields of environmental resource carrying capacity. Alternative: research in the carrying capacity of resources
Line 80: Please simplify: in the fields of environmental resource carrying capacity, environmental health assessment, and sustainability assessment. Why not: in environmental research. This is a very redundant summary, or add more relevant references
Line 83: “well” can be deleted. It does not add anything
Line 88/89: DPEBLR (driver - pressure - insecurity-pregnant environment - insecurity-affected body - loss - response). Dear authors, this is not clear to me at all. What do you mean with insecurity pregnant????. You are explaining that in line 134. Perhaps it is even better to refer to Figure 1 already here (line 88/89).
Line 94: believes do you mean assumes?
Table 1. Can superscript be used, where appropriate?
Line 330. You may wish to include the reference Makarigakis, A.K., & Jimenez-Cisneros, B.E. (2019). UNESCO’s contribution to face global water challenges. Water, 11(2), 388. https://doi.org/10.3390/w11020388 as this paper contains a SDG figure where water takes a central position.
Line 379: control the scale of population growth, see comment in the abstract above
Line 403/404: is this line { This section is not mandatory but may be added if there are patents resulting from 403 the work reported in this manuscript.} necessary or can it be deleted?
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