The Holy See and Disability Sport: From Attention to Commitment
Round 1
Reviewer 1 Report
1. Page 1, lines 20-22: The word "Theologians" should not be capitalized. The sentence should be restructured for additional clarity.
2. Page 4, line 192: Place the term beautiful reality in single quotation marks for emphasis.
3. Page 6, lines 298 and 309: Remove period and replace with semi-colon.
Comments for author File: 
Comments.pdf
English is fine.
Author Response
Thanks a lot for your appreciation and comments, suggestions!
- Page 1, lines 20-22: The word "Theologians" should not be capitalized. The sentence should be restructured for additional clarity.
OK! (see text)
- Page 4, line 192: Place the term beautiful reality in single quotation marks for emphasis.
OK! (see text)
- Page 6, lines 298 and 309: Remove period and replace with semi-colon.
OK! (see text)
Nevertheless i have decided to let my text be read by a native speaker and the result should be much better now!
Author Response File: Author Response.pdf
Reviewer 2 Report
The article seeks to document the people approach to disabled sport in the twentieth and twenty-first centuries. The author spends the majority of time identifying and documenting the various times popes have addressed disabled athletes or called for inclusion throughout sport. While a phenomenal documentation of these various addresses, there is little analysis of these texts and does not situate them in wider theological discourse, either in Roman Catholicism or Protestantism.
At the end of the article, the author shows how John Paul II was not the first Pope to address disabled athletes. The body of the article concludes with a wonderful quotation from Pope John XXIII, but does not analyze or evaluate the importance of this speech. Further analysis of these various documents would help strengthen the article and provide greater depth to the work. While important to document the consistent affirmation the popes have given to athletes who are disabled, the article falls short of providing analysis or other engagement.
The largest issue in the text is the glaring lack of quotations or citations when using the words of the popes or the Holy See. While the author does reference all documents, there are large parts of these documents that are quoted word for word in the article without proper citation. In particular, the section on Sport for all, is almost completely copied with little or no quotation marks or specific citations. I had Sport for all open while reviewing this article and could read almost word for word the two documents side by side. Almost the entire sixth page of the article is from Sport for all, with not one citation. This is highly problematic and needs major revision.
Specific comments are in attached document.
Comments for author File: Comments.pdf
There were many grammatical errors present, but not to the extent that the paper was unreadable. I would encourage the author to revise again, being mindful of punctuation and tense. I would also encourage the author to become more familiar with expectations around citation. In its current form, I cannot recommend its publication as they do not properly cite large sections of the article.
Author Response
I have resolved as much as possible your questions and followed as best as I could your suggestions. I am really grateful for your thorough review of my manuscript. Of course I have consulted a native speaker to revise my English.
As you put: "The largest issue in the text is the glaring lack of quotations or citations when using the words of the popes or the Holy See. While the author does reference all documents, there are large parts of these documents that are quoted word for word in the article without proper citation. In particular, the section on Sport for all, is almost completely copied with little or no quotation marks or specific citations. I had Sport for all open while reviewing this article and could read almost word for word the two documents side by side. Almost the entire sixth page of the article is from Sport for all, with not one citation. This is highly problematic and needs major revision."
Although I put in the bibliography : “Sport for all: cohesive, accessible and tailored to each Person. 2022. Available online: https://vaticansummitsportforall.com/wp-content/uploads/2022/09/the-declaration.pdf (accessed on 26 July 2023). In the article we follow very near the text of the Declaration”, you are totally right to make your point! I have totally reworked that part and I have put clearly what I cite and from which page I took the quotation from the declaration.
in attachment you find the reworked manuscript
Author Response File: Author Response.pdf
Round 2
Reviewer 2 Report
Much improved and great edits! I think this has a better flow and focus which will help the reader. You also did a good job with the citations.
