Sustainable Water Policymaking for the Hotel Industry: A Longitudinal Network Analysis of Policy Documents
Round 1
Reviewer 1 Report
Comments and Suggestions for Authors1. All abbreviations used in the text (even obvious ones) must be explained in the text (e.g. PUB, CSR…) - this does not apply to abbreviations from figures
2. Methods and materials should be supplemented. For instance, no explanation of NetDraw and UCINET. The list of 76 analyzed policies is also missing in the appendix.
3. Some of the figures are completely illegible (fig. 1,3 5). The font should be enlarged.
4. Line 527 – missing dot
5. Line 373 – why not a number of reference?
6. Conclusions must be rephrased and presented in a synthetic way, e.g. in bullet points. This is not the place for such long descriptions.
7. In the introduction, please indicate more clearly the research gap and what innovative this article brings.
Comments on the Quality of English Languageminor corrections
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Reviewer 2 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsThe paper’s topic is fascinating, and the article is very structured. The flow of ideas is given in an exciting fashion. The paper’s contribution is clear, and the discussion is fruitful. Just add the paper’s organization at the end of the first section.
Comments on the Quality of English LanguageThe paper's language is acceptable. Just a swift revision is needed to correct some issues.
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Reviewer 3 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsI very much like this paper and the approach it takes to discussing sustainable water policies in the hotel industry of Singapore. It serves simultaneously as a study of Singapore but also provides a roadmap for how such policy analysis can be replicated in other states. I think the authors should highlight that issue at the end of the paper - that the analysis is not just a one-off for Singapore but could be used around the world in order to gain more comprehensive understanding of water policies and how they have been evolving over time across geographies.
A few specific comments:
line 273: Typo with "Th"
line 313-14: Why the four year window? Are the results sensitive to different window widths or when windows start? More explanation is required about why the arbitrary choice of four years.
Table 2: "Degree Centralisation" should be "Degree of Centralisation"?
Line 414/15: The statement that starts "Ego-network" is not a sentence and should be rewritten.
Line 662: "theme" should be "themes"?
Line 666, 674, 684: All very good points and address the limitations that came to my mind when I read the paper. Good job by the authors to include these limitations.
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Reviewer 4 Report
Comments and Suggestions for Authors
Dear author,
First of all, I am glad to have the opportunity to read the article entitled “Sustainable Water Policymaking for the Hotel Industry: A Longitudinal Network Analysis of Policy Documents”, that I have read with great interest.
The paper has good literature and motivator to conduct such interesting topic.
However, some points that that can further improve the quality of the manuscript are below.
1- What are the criteria to include or exclude paper from the investigated 329 key policy documents (co-)produced between 2001 and 2020.
2- The authors argue that “Five main stages are applied to the data analysis process”, can you please justify with reference this approach of the five-stage process.
3- The case study of Singapore might eliminate the generalizability of the results result, please justify and elaborate on this issue.
4- The paper can benefit from a proof-reading service.
5- Theoretical implication needs more discussion.
6- Limitation and further study opportunity are missing.
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Reviewer 5 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsDear Authors,
Thanks for studying the policies related to water sustainability in the case of hotels in Singapore. Manuscript is well written, and analysis is correctly described. Hence, it deserves being published in Sustainability journal after reviewing these few comments:
- Water source could be important in sustainability terms. Policies might induce a tendency to desalt sea water, but perhaps it will cause an increase in energy consumption and/or an ocean contamination. Perhaps this effect is influencing indirectly T44 or T22 policies, but I am wondering if these factors were also analyzed in this study.
- Drinkability of consumed water may also be important in this study. Were specific policies regarding the analysis of microorganisms, heavy metals or the water hardness be also included?
- Does the study regard which policy themes are applied in practice? Because statement of a policy and implementation of it could be different things. An exploration about which policies are more effective in practice would be appealing. If not considered but assumed, it is recommended to declare it in the text.
Typographic errors:
* A dot is missing in line 527.
* In pages 6 and 7 there are misplaced symbols.
Best regards.
Comments on the Quality of English LanguageTypographic errors:
* A dot is missing in line 527.
* In pages 6 and 7 there are misplaced symbols.
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