Peer Attachment and Self-Control: Implication on Social Anxiety in Young Adults
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Round 1
Reviewer 1 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsThank you for the opportunity to review this manuscript. It concerns the influence of the social environment on the well-being of young people who start a new chapter in their lives in the form of studying. This period is associated with numerous challenges that different people may experience and cope with in different ways.
The manuscript has a coherent structure, is well prepared and described. It is reasonable to present the logic of deduction leading to the formulation of the research objective. The introduction contains correct references to the literature on the subject, thus lending credibility to the idea for the study and its implementation.
The methodological section presents information on sampling and describes its basic parameters. In this section, recognized and recognizable measurement tools such as IPPA, EAESDIS and EBA were used. The results are well described and presented.
Additionally, the results empirically and statistically confirm common assumptions about the relationships between the way of spending time, self-control, social engagement and worries and anxiety, also taking into account gender.
The practical implications section also deserves special attention, where the limitations of this study are also skillfully pointed out. The discussion is also well-conducted, as the authors point to similar studies that have achieved similar results, and also polemicize with others when this has proven valuable for the results of their work.
I have only minor comments on the text, which basically boil down to developing the thread raised in lines 218-219. What I mean by this is supplementing this paragraph with a clearer explanation of their decision.
Author Response
REVIEWER 1
Thank you for the opportunity to review this manuscript. It concerns the influence of the social environment on the well-being of young people who start a new chapter in their lives in comment.
This period is associated with numerous schallenges that different people may experience and cope with indifferent ways.
The manuscript has a coherent structure, is well prepared and described. It is reasonable to present the logic of deduction leading to the formulation of the research objective. The introduction contains correct references to the literature on the subject, thus lending credibility to the idea for the study and its implementation.
The methodological section presents information on sampling and describes its basic parameters. In this section, recognized and recognizable measurement tools such as IPPA, EAESDIS and EBA were used. The results are well described and presented.
Additionally, the results empirically and statistically confirm common assumptions about the relationships between the way of spending time, self-control, social engagement and worries and anxiety, also taking into account gender.
The practical implications section also deserves special attention, where the limitations of this study are also skillfully pointed out. The discussion is also well-conducted, as the authors point to similar studies that have achieved similar results, and also polemicize with others when this has proven valuable for the results of their work.
I have only minor comments on the text, which basically boil down to developing the thread raised in lines 218-219. What I mean by this is supplementing this paragraph with a clearer explanation of their decision.
Authors: Thank you for taking the time to read our work. Thank you for your comments and we have made the change as suggested.
As there is no evidence in the literature that hours of sleep can be related to the development of attachment, particularly with peers.
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Reviewer 2 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsExcellent research topic that is relevant and contributes to the body of knowledge. Additional feedback is attached.
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Feedback is attached.
Author Response
REVIEWER 2
- Consider revising the title to exclude a question. For example: Peer Attachment and Self-Control: Implication on Social Anxiety in Young Adults
Authors: Thanks for the suggestion, we accept and change the title.
Peer Attachment and Self-Control: Implication on Social Anxiety in Young Adults
- Line 18, 19, and 20: Young adulthood is the period after the age of 18 and is portrayed by the ambivalence in achieving a stable and independent self and developing an identity profile in intimate relationships and professional life.
Consider using a different term from “portrayed” and rewriting the entire sentence to increase clarity and flow of thought.
Authors: We agree with the suggestion, we rewrite the sentence.
In Western societies, adulthood begins at the age of eighteen and is characterised by ambivalence in the development of a stable and independent self, and the development of an identity profile in intimate relationships and professional life.
- Line 21: Delete period after [3]
Authors: Thanks, we rewrite the sentence.
- Line 22: Attachment concerns the intrinsic
Consider using a different term to replace “concerns”. I.e., involves, relates to, etc.
Authors: Thanks, we substitute the term concerns.
- Line 26: … himself and others.
Replace “himself “with “themselves”!
Authors: Thanks for the suggestion, we replace it.
- Make the changes to the rest of the document to represent the diversity of gender identified in the manuscript.
Authors: Thanks, we had this care.
- Line 27 and 28: In this way, it is assumed that young people started to look for attachment functions in significant others, namely, peers.
Replace “started” with “start”
Authors: we decided change the sentence.
In this way, it is assumed that young people develop attachment functions with significant others, namely, peers.
- Line 30: The adolescent's contact with multiple contexts will lead him to expand his affective…
Delete “him” and “his”
Sentence will read: The adolescent's contact with multiple contexts will lead to expand affective relationships and, subsequently, to develop bonding relationships beyond the family…
Authors: Thanks, we follow the suggestion.
- Line 172 and 173: Outlier analyses were carried out to identify those participants which could affect the results.
Replace “which” with “who”.
Authors: Thanks, we changed.
- Line 274 and 275: The present study also aimed to analyze the role of the quality of peer attachment and self-control in the anxiety of young adults in a university context.
Revise the highlighted statement to increase clarity and flow of thought.
Authors: According to suggestion the sentence was clarified.
The present study also aimed to analyze the role of the quality of peer attachment and self-control in the anxiety of young adults that come from a university context.
- Line 302: The main purpose of this research was to analyze the role of peer attachment and…
Replace with “The purpose of this research…”
Authors: We replace the sentence as request.
The purpose of this research was to analyze the role of peer attachment and self-control in developing social anxiety in young adults that come from the university context.
- Line 312 and 313: The results suggest that men's perception of their representation with peers may depend on the relationship's quality and closeness, so feelings of distancing and isolation.
Consider revising as follows: The results suggest that men's perception of their representation with peers may depend on the quality of the relationship and closeness, so feelings of distancing and isolation…
- Line 314: … may mark some relationships with peers.
Revise highlighted words to increase clarity. Word choice!
Authors: We follow the suggestion for the sentence.
The results suggest that men's perception of their representation with peers may depend on the quality of relationship and closeness, so feelings of distancing and isolation can jeopardise some relationships with peers.
- Line 365-368: Sentence is too long. Breakdown the sentence to increase clarity and flow of thought.
Authors: Thanks for the suggestion. We split the sentence.
- Line 412-414: Revise sentence: Communicate in a succinct manner to increase flow of thought.
Authors: Thanks for the suggestion we reviewed the sentences.
- Throughout the document, be mindful of the following:
Write out in words, numbers that are less than 10. Numbers 10 and above are identified numerically.
Use gender neutral language since males and females were included in the study.
Authors: We take in to account the suggestions along the manuscript.
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Round 2
Reviewer 1 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsSince I did not have many comments, and those I listed were taken into account, after re-reading the manuscript I noticed several improvements in the text that make it better, I accept the current form of the manuscript.
Reviewer 2 Report
Comments and Suggestions for AuthorsWell done and great article.